At camp this year I was so worried about staying away from home for two nights. When we got there, I ran so fast to see where the water-slide and flying fox were.
That afternoon, we got to choose what cool activity we wanted to go on. I decided to go on the the long, slippery black slide. It was embarrassing because I was stopping every time at the end.
When I was on the water slide, it seemed like a long bumpy slippery slide, and I thought that I was going to hurt my back, but I didn’t.
The next day, we had rotations and it was very important to listen to where we were going first. When it was our turn to go on the flying fox, I was very worried about it, because at the end there’s a stopper like a slingshot, but not a flexible one. So when you hit it you didn’t go smashing into the tires too hard. When I went down I discovered that it wasn’t so bad at all - it was awesome and fun.
At the end of camp, I realised it was a great experience and I’m looking forward to the next camp I go on. I also felt very proud of myself for staying away from home.
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The long, slippery black slide - a great description Kahlee! It sounds like you had a great time on camp. You should be very proud of yourself and how you coped being away from home! Great writing buddy!
ReplyDeleteWow, some great adjectives and similes Kahlee! You did look funny when you stopped on the slide though. Keep up the great writing :)
ReplyDeleteMiss C
I was looking at some of Mr B's photos today, Kahlee, and when I read your description of the slide I could easily imagine you sliding down. I like the adjectives that you've included (long, black, slippery, bumpy) and also the way that you've included your emotions. I heard a whisper that some of the people who shot quickly to the end of the slide actually had a bit of help from slippery soapsuds, so I think you shouldn't feel too embarrassed, after all. It all sounds like lots of fun.
ReplyDeleteMrs L
hello thanks for commenting on my writing:
ReplyDeleteMrs C
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Kahlee !!
Hi Kahlee this is Meg your story is sooooo cool camp was so much fun you used lots of describing words it is a great story!!!!
ReplyDeleteMeg!
thanks meg
ReplyDeletekahlee norton
Wow Kahlee I really like your story and I liked the way you were honest.You also had great adjectives!Maybe next time you could say a little more about the where you were but otherwise it was great!
ReplyDeleteyea lots of describing words awesome
ReplyDeleteperry
awesome story kahlee you were honest an that was kwl maybe next time you could um.. sorry it was just so awesome!
ReplyDeletethanks so so so so so so much holly jesie and perry holly i liked it how u said there was nothing to work on and jessie i like it how u told me what to work on :) and thanks perry
ReplyDeleteYOU R SO WELCOME! it was really awesome!
ReplyDeleteKahlee great adjectives and i like it that you told how you fell just try think outside the box to make it descriptive
ReplyDeletethanks
ReplyDeletekahlee norton
nice paragraphs and good adjectives nice camp reflection
ReplyDeletefrom olly
thanks lewis and jevon ill try think out side the box!!!
ReplyDeleteawesome olly thanks
ReplyDeleteIt was really cool and lots of ajectives but next time MORE RIGHTING!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteok thanks
ReplyDeletenice work pod 11 i like ur work
ReplyDeleteHello Kahlee
ReplyDeleteThankyou for saying well done when Emma got player of the day she was taking about you to all her cousins and friends all day.
Ilove your story there is nothing you need to do better in your story.
KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Hello Kahlee
ReplyDeleteThankyou for saying to Emma well done for getting player of the day she was taking about you all day to her family and friends
there is no stuff you need to work on KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!!!!!!! YOU ROCK !!!!!!!!