Monday, May 24, 2010

Lewis' Camp Reflection

We’re going on camp and I’m overwhelmed with excitement. We’re in my Dad’s car. I’m raring to go down the long water slide.I wonder what the wind’s going to feel like rushing through my hair on the flying fox.

The first activity was the lovely water slide which gives me a chill down my spine. I cant wait to zoom down there and pierce the water and make the water pour out of the slide. I realised the water slide was awesome and I would love to go down there again and I believe I can beat the fastest time with ease (yeah right).

Now I’m looking down the long flying fox. It gets me worried but what do you know. I’m already shooting down, it feels like it’s whacking my hair but it’s not. And do you know what I think? I think it’s like a cold shower on a sunny day.

We had kayaking last, but not least. My group discovered a big stingray. It was huge. Today I have learnt many things and I can’t wait to tell others about my awesome discoveries.

Well that was the best camp I’ve ever been on. I feel other people should go as well. I’ve learnt that I would love to go again, and I cant believe I was nervous before hand. I wonder now what other cool stuff life will bring.

18 comments:

  1. I'm sure you will experience a lot of cool things during your lifetime, Lewis! You just have to grab every opportunity you can. I enjoyed reading your reflective recount - I liked your simile about the flying fox being like 'a cold shower on a sunny day'. Very descriptive!
    Mrs Muston

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  2. Wow Lewis, your camp reflection is fantastic. You have chosen your words carefully and have conveyed a sense of excitement and enthusiasm. With your terrific attitude I'm sure that life has lots of wonderful new adventures in store for you. Have fun trying them out, making sure that they are responsible risks that you are taking!
    Go for it!

    Mrs Leydon

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  3. Fab camp reflection Lewis. You made me smile when you talked about your hair and how it would feel going down the slide - Hee! Hee! I especially loved your last sentence - I wonder now what other cool stuff life will bring - very thought provoking indeed!!! Awesome work buddy!!!

    Mrs Magrath

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  4. Hi its jevon nice recount i thing you could improve on not going overboard with adjectives but its good.But they were good similies

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  5. i realy liked your story i do not think ther was enythink bad about it go lewis


    by connor t

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  6. You have good similes and verbs
    but I think you went over the top in the
    first paragraph.

    Yours sinserly
    Ben and Ben :)

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  7. Nice recount good adjectives try and talk about things a little more and good sentences
    from Oliver

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  8. hi lew mean words as in cool hahaha



    perry

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  9. Cool recount Lewis I liked your adjectives and that everything made sense but next time maybe you should not stay to long on the same subject.

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  10. AWESOME story Lewis your writing has got a lot of good describing words!!!

    Meg!!

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  11. i like ur words and ajectives
    but next time can u right more
    because it was awsome

    SARA

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  12. Good recount lewis it was really cool you did a great job you could improve on maybe you had too many adjectives but cool!

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  13. We think you did really well. We like the way you used the adjectives and thinking words. Next time you could use more thinking word.

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  14. Hi Random person
    Your story is so cool you have lots of cool words in it.
    you need more thinking words.

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  15. Denise Limby aka Lew's mumJune 2, 2010 at 9:40 PM

    I am really proud of you Lew; you have clearly put a lot of effort into expressing your thoughts and feelings about the camp. I enjoyed reading this -it felt real and immediate -I felt like I was out there on camp beside you. I am also impressed with your natural conversational style. This is good writing, well done and Love from MUM! ps you asked me to put in something you can improve on. well the only thing i can think is maybe doing more chores at home LOL!!!

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  16. Rose Austin Emmas MumJune 2, 2010 at 11:39 PM

    Hay whats up
    There was nothing you need to work on in you writing you use lots and lots and lots of great thinking words in your story.

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  17. Trina Dassler (Connors mum)June 3, 2010 at 12:21 AM

    Hey Lew, your reflection was WARSUM!!! im pleased you had so many amazing experiences and im sure with your "go get em"attitude you will obtain many more fab times. Well done!!!

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  18. Hi its jevon you did really good in youre verds but you just went over the top a bit.

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